Julia J

Nice piece just a few things I noticed: We, sons of the soil would no longer carry on in our cold homes thinking the sky's the limit. No, we would ...

What you typed here is rather skeletal and could definately afford a whole lot more description. In general there are punctuation and just little lowercase/uppercase mistakes. Just a few mistakes ...

Well first I want to thank you for your critique, it's very much appreciated. The story actually has nothing to do with vampires/werewolves lol I have no interest in those ...

delete plz